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Crazy (080128) Outline – REWRITE-Act3

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Act Three:

  • The Trip – acid+e+depression+imagination – 24 hrs of tripping
  • Hospitals, a day, two days, a week – cops – questioning, Chris denies knowing Billy. Blames the ecstasy on the club and the parties.
  • Beck gets in finally to visit him. Tells him the story: Bryce killed himself and they only found ecstasy in him. Beck took the info on Billy to the cops and they ignored them. Chris asks her if Billy asked about him. Beck is horrified that he’s so pathetic. The cops catch Beck and throw her out – warning her to stop pursuing this.
  • Chris escapes from the Hospital with beck’s help.
  • They find Billy living at the Mr. Rockfer’s house.
  • She is about to kill the big boss when Chris breaks in – Don’t try to stop me!
  • Boss catches them and comes after them to kill them
  • A chase
  • Kill the Boss
  • Beck or Billy? he chooses…
  • In love, happily ever after
  • The end – Final Image – the guy that always get dumped get
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Crazy (080110) Outline – REWRITE 2nd Act

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Act Two:

  • HIDING their Love Montage – Billy and Chris – BEHIND BRYCE’S BACK sex and more sex, fun, dreamy – parks and matinées, calling in sick and going to the museum – Cute people and good sex.
  • RESTAURANT – Bryce catches Billy at the table while Chris is in bathroom. Chris disappears. Bryce hunts but finds no one and drags Billy outside and yells then leaves – Chris watches whole thing.
  • Chris asks her why she is with Bryce, she tells Russ that she is going to dump him soon – he laughs this off, she makes a point of telling him that she has to end the relationship and that something is coming that will take her away. When he presses her she walks out.
  • Chris stumbles into Terry’s office and professes his love for the stripper Billy. Terry is stunned, “The one Bryce is fucking?” Yes. It is agreed that they will keep hiding it from Bryce. Terry is very pissed at him and worried about Bryce overreacting.
  • Bryce comes into work raving – complains he knows Billy is cheating on him – sounds crazy (slow decent – speeding up) complains of being thirsty and has a funny red rash on his neck.
  • Chris with Billy at more hidden location. Billy tries to dump him but he talks her out of it, “a little more time”….she doesn’t want to hurt him and agrees. Then they fuck, but she warns him, ‘not much longer.’
  • Beck discovers that Billy is related to MR. ROCKFER, the main partner for the law firm. Does Rockfer know his niece is a stripper at a club he frequents. Does he know one of his main lawyers, his nephew, is fucking her!?
  • Beck starts following Billy and has run-in with Bryce – he is totally nuts and following Billy like Beck is doing. He demands to know why she is following Billy, get violent and Beck knocks his ass out!
  • Beck finds Chris and Billy (Beck totally identifies Billy as the girl from the research. They stare long at each other – Billy bolts – Beck tries to tell Russ about Billy’s relation to boss. He’s not interested and says it’s a small world and maybe they don’t even know they are related – coincidence.
  • OFFICE – Bryce is hallucinating and fighting Terry, accusing him of fucking Billy and is taken away by cops. Chris thanks Terry for taking the heat for him, Terry wants to tell him something when the cops come in to interview them and they are separated. (Beck finds a flask Bryce was drinking from and steals it.)
  • Beck tells Chris that there is some exotic drug in Bryce’s flask, she may have drugged him. Chris wants to find her, Beck is worried Chris may be next. Chris accuses Beck of trying to undermine what he has with Billy, he rushes to the strip club to find Billy.
  • STRIP CLUB – Chris finds Billy with Terry now – he is devastated. Terry tries to stop him. Billy stops him from pursuing.
  • Yet another Chris depression montage – lots of walking
  • Beck finds an article about a huge child molestation case in the hometown where Billy and Mr. Rockfer are from. The defendants was a group of lawyers that got off when accused of molesting three young girls. The names of the kids were never released and the charges dropped on a technicality; it was Mr. Rockfer.
  • Chris seems less sad and more contemplative. Gets wisdom from some odd source about moving on, decides to toughen up. He is going to be one of those guys.
  • Beck tells Chris about the article and the lawyers. Chris says he is trying to move on and wants to avoid anything of her. He is going to find Terry so he can apologize and have his friend back. Beck slaps him, ‘listen to me’. He listens, “what if Terry is next?”. Chris starts to believe.
  • Chris and Beck find Terry (utterly depressed – a mess) and crying about Billy leaving him. She was suppose to go to a party with him but she went with…Terry doesn’t finish – Chris tries to find out where Billy is but Terry blames Chris for polluting her head “and now she’s gone to the party”… He attacks Chris. Beck subdues Terry. Chris finds the invitation for a black tie event Terry was suppose to go to with and takes it.
  • Beck and Chris goes to the strip club to find Billy. She quit three days ago.
  • Beck shows Chris that Rockfer evidence where he was accused of molesting Billy and that he doesn’t know its her. She must be out for revenge.
  • Russ dresses up (1st time) and looks adult. Beck dresses like a woman instead of a detective, pretty hot. They go to the party and find Billy there with the big boss
  • Russ tries every trick to get her to go away from him. He starts fight with Big Boss. Billy jabs him with a small needle.
  • Russ goes on a trip of a lifetime as the drugs kick in – sees his own death – suicide – being alone. They take him away.
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    Crazy (071207) Outline – REWRITE 1st Act



    Act One:

    • Montage: MAIN CHARACTER, Slacker CHRIS gets dumped, over and over by every woman he dates (3 – HOT woman, PLAIN and 50yr old MOTHER of 4) Chris is a Gen X – brilliant but immature and very low confidence.
    • Intro (Film Noir feel): Best friend/roommate BECK (She wants to fix Chris)(Chris is in her living room, has to go to bathroom – bathroom is her darkroom) – A female Detective wanna-be that is in love with hardboiled-detective-acting Chris but Chris is not interested that way (he thinks) but they have a closeness, an intimacy, a familiarity borders on love. Beck investigates Chris’ girlfriends all the time (credit, DL, etc.) Beck mocks him for always coming to her for help (guy needling). Chris gets defensive (acts like a girl.)
    • Meet friend TERRY, male, ex-slacker (smokes weeed constantly still) – high powered lawyer on the rise – got Chris his job (file clerk) – then meet BRYCE the evil Lawyer (#2) that loves to mock Chris – Bryce is smarmy.
    • Intro Theme in conversation between Chris and Terry: How’s anybody going to like you when you don’t like you? (where did you get that one, did you make that up? Just think about it Chris!)
    • Client/Lawyer party at strip club (Film Noir) – Chris meets BILLY beautiful stripper bartender- they hit it off – she is extremely literate Gen X – smart, quick; they talk all night She won’t have sex with him but they sleep together – breakfast/intimacy – he misses work.
    • Chris runs to Beck – he’s in love with Billy. Beck doesn’t want to hear it and refuses to talk to him about her. He leaves upset. Beck runs to the computer and starts a search for her name.
    • Chris runs to Terry about missing work, tells him he’s in love w/ stripper bartender – Big boss (MR. ROCKERFER) comes with Bryce and scolds Chris and shoos him off – Rockerfer asks Terry if Russ can be trusted. You brought him in and if he starts talking then he’s out. Then Rock winks and says ‘have fun tonight’ and giggle like a schoolgirl as he leaves
    • CLIENT party for a FEMALE COMPANY at a MALE STRIP CLUB – Chris helping Terry run the party for the clients. Chris is waiting for Billy (keeps checking phone) Billy shows up with Bryce and they disappears into the back. Chris follows searches and
    • Chris finds Billy fucking Bryce – She tries to stop Russ from leaving – he’s gone
    • Depression Montage – droning green hued TV, in bed, bongs, green video games
    • Beck brings him favorite food. Terry brings him porn.
    • Terry – You always give up because you think you don’t deserve anyone loving you – but you do…(Chris: I want her!) Then go get her!
    • Chris finds Billy and demands an explanation – we aren’t married, I have no responsibility to you – disappears.
    • Beck investigating Billy finds small information and she hides it from Chris
    • Chris confronts Billy at club where she works – Bryce is there with the lawyers – Chris threatens a scene (I’ll quit!) – she agrees to meet Chris if he goes away and doesn’t make a scene.
    • She pretends to be ‘female’ sick. Bryce nastily excuses her from the party

    • Chris and Billy meet for drinks and they argue but it turns to fun, chemistry –
    • They get drunk
    • All night sex
    • She demands that they must hide it. Chris is horrified that this last night of passion means what? She will not stop seeing Bryce. She dances around why this is so important and begs Chris to not press her on this. He promises. She is ecstatic and fucks him again. Chris proposes they get married. Billy can’t stop laughing. She makes an apocalyptic allusion and fucks him again.
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    Crazy (071119) Outline



    Act One:

    • Montage: Slacker RUSS gets dumped, over and over by every woman he dates
    • Intro: Best friend/roommate BECK – A female Detective wanna-be that is in love with hardboiled detectives and Russ – Russ not interested that way
    • Meet friend Tommy, ex-slacker – high powered lawyer – got Russ his job (file clerk) – meet Bruce the evil Lawyer (#2) that loves to mock Russ
    • Intro Theme: How’s anybody going to like you when you don’t like you?
    • Client/Lawyer party at strip club – Russ meets BILLY beautiful stripper bartender- they hit it off – talk all night She won’t have sex with him but they sleep together – breakfast/intimacy – he misses work
    • Runs to Beck – he’s in love, Billy is the greatest…Beck doesn’t want to hear it
    • Russ runs to Tommy about missing work, tells him he’s in love w/ stripper bartender – Big boss comes with Bruce and scolds Russ and shoos him off to tell Tommy about something. Boss asks Tommy about Russ and if he can be trusted. Then he kids him about the strippers from the night before.
    • Office party – Russ waiting for Billy to call is dragged to party with Tommy – Billy is there with Bruce – she disappears with him, Russ follows and
    • Russ finds Billy fucking Bruce – She tries to stop Russ from leaving – he’s gone
    • Depression Montage
    • Tommy tries to cheer him up. Beck brings him favorite food.
    • Tommy – You always give up because you think you don’t deserve anyone loving you – but you do…go get her.
    • Russ finds Billy and demands an explanation – She can’t lie to him but refuses to explain herself – we aren’t married, I have no responsibility to you – she leaves
    • Beck starts investigating Billy
    • Russ confronts Billy at club – Bruce is there with the lawyers – she agrees to meet Russ if he goes away.
    • She meets him for drinks and they argue but it turns to fun, the old chemistry – She fucks him and they are in love – they must hide it.


    • Act Two:

    • HIDING their Love Montage – Billy and Russ – BEHIND BRYCE’S BACK sex and more sex, fun, dreamy
    • Billy makes Russ promise to tell no one about them especially the Lawyer Bruce who she is still seeing – He begs her to dump him – she tells Russ that she will have to let him go soon – he laughs this off, she makes a point of telling him that she has to. When he presses she walks out.
    • Bruce at work is raving – complains he knows Billy is cheating on him – sounds crazy
    • Becky discovers that Billy is related to the Big Boss!
    • Becky has run-in with Bruce
    • Becky finds Russ and Billy – Billy bolts – tries to tell Russ about Billy’s relation to boss. He’s not interested.
    • Bruce is hallucinating fighting – accusing Tommy of fucking Billy, paranoid- attacks Tommy and is taken away. Becky finds a flask he drinks from and steals it.
    • Russ finds out that Billy is with Tommy now – he is devastated.
    • Billy won’t see Russ. “I told you that I was moving on”
    • Becky finds that flask has an exotic poison
    • He finds Tommy (utterly depressed – a mess) and confronts – “I’m taking your advice and not giving up” – He tries to find out where Billy is but Tommy is not well – sick. He slips into a delusional state but gives Russ an invitation to a fancy party. Tommy is taken away.
    • Becky traces Billy’s past to the family of the Big Boss. She finds a clue that she is out for revenge.
    • Russ dresses up (1st time) and looks adult. He goes to the party and finds Billy there with the big boss
    • Russ tries every trick to get her to go away from him. He starts fight with Big Boss. Billy doses him with the poison.
    • Russ goes on a trip of a lifetime as the drugs kick in – sees his own death – suicide – being alone. They take him away.


    • Act Three:

    • Becky helps him come back
    • Russ regroups and plans to find her…revenge? Still in love?
    • Finds her – with the Big Boss.
    • FINALE – Unknown – what does he want from her now. Is he a better man now or still just a little boy?
    • Final Image – the guy that always get dumped get?????
    • He changes his name to Christian or something more butch like JOHN.

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    He’s Crazy (070918)

    I’m looking for my opening image which sets the tone of the entire script and which also seemingly acts as a unifying principle in the overlying metaphor / message of the work. This image is the first thing we see and is somehow ‘answered’ with the last thing we see making this image utterly important and incredibly germane.

    So how do I know what this image / idea is?

    There are several ideas / threads running through this story:

    • Going crazy – losing one’s mind, the precariousness of mental sanity
    • Being pathetic – (aka emotional) The main character is the guy who always gets dumped. He is on edge with his emotions and in need of being centered. His best friend, a woman, is also pretty pathetic in her secret love for him.
    • Revenge – the main female love interest is a serial killer bent on exacting revenge on the ones who wronged her
    • Battle of the sexes

    Battle of the sexes is not what this is about ultimately. There are moments where this is an issue and the overall theme of a woman serial killer is kinda feminist but this doesn’t really set the tone or the mood I am dealing with. Revenge is also kind of a side issue that doesn’t really get to the heart of the matter as does ‘going crazy’. None of these touch on the main character and the arc that he is traveling along.

    The image I am leaning towards is of our main character emotionally devastated and crying on the soldier of the woman that is totally in love with him. This event reveals both peoples insecurities and both peoples neediness and characterizes the central theme of the movie which I think is learning to stand on a solid foundation without the emotional triggers tearing us down.

    This simple image would also serve as a bookend as he comes back to his best friend at the end, hopefully changed and more of a self-sufficient, confident and action oriented man, able to stand up for himself and take care of himself.

    Yes, this is my opening image. I also like the way the story is about one thing (the guy that always gets dumped and then decides to make a stand for the woman he loves, realizes that she is a serial killer) but is really about something more personal and more specifically human.

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    He’s Crazy (070724)

    (he’s the guy that’s always getting dumped – you know – that friend that couldn’t get a girl if they were giving them away and when he finally does get with someone he ruins it by becoming jealous, depressed, anxious, paranoid – Well he finally decides not to take ‘no’ for an answer.)

    A file clerk for a prestigious law firm tries to be one of the ‘guys’, one of the womanizing, slick, rich lawyers he works around. He’s tired of women looking down on him and not giving him the time of day. He gathers the support of one of the firm’s brightest stars that got him his job and offers to help him become more slick.

    And he meets his dream, the girl next door. She’s beautiful, funny as hell, smart, sarcastic and loves sex. What more could he want? He falls head over heels and everything is going well, until – he takes her to meet the ‘guys’, the lawyers at an expensive club. He starts getting paranoid as she flirts around with the group and dances the night away. His worst nightmares come true as she purposely dumps him on the spot and goes home with one of the lawyers.

    He is devastated and disappears from work – no show. The lawyer friend comes to find him wallowing in his apartment, unable to do the basics. He helps the guy get back to functioning and helps build his spirit. Much to the lawyers chagrin the clerk gathers his strength and decides to not take it lying down and fight to get her back. The lawyer tries to stop him but can’t.

    That night the Clerk returns to the club to confront the girl to find that not only has she moved on from the first lawyer to another one of the friends, but the first lawyer she was with is a mess: jealous, angry, lurking – he is also trying to get her back! The Clerk is stunned and unsure how to handle it. He finds the right time and confronts her. She tries to be nice but he won’t take no for an answer.

    He refuses to let go. The girl implores. And that’s when things get ugly. She threatens to kill him if he doesn’t back off. On top of that the first lawyer she was with loses his junk and attacks the next lawyer in line with the girl. He’s goes foaming at the mouth loony and is arrested and thrown in the loony bin.

    But now our Clerk is obsessed. What is she doing and why? And why would she so quickly forsake their love. And what the hell is she doing to these guys. One by one they are going off the deep end.

    Can he figure it out before he becomes the next victim of “Crazy”?

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    crazy (070404)

    Gen X meets Femme Fatale

    Main Character – Matt

    Matt is Generation X through and through, brilliant yet slightly withdrawn (who am I) – He’s adult child…a boy in a man’s body yet highly functional as he is a Doctor. Yet emotionally, you always get the feeling that he is on the edge of falling apart.

    Being the child of a divorce he exhibits a lot of the earmarks of this type of person: defensive, sped-up, hyper-active, nervous, paranoid, jealous, emotionally cracked, clingy, falls in love fast, afraid of women…

    He is scared of women and feels sometimes that they know what he is thinking. He think that no woman would want to have anything to do with him. He wants to be able to approach women and be the stud doctor like his new friends from the Hospital, but, he really thinks that he doesn’t have what it takes.

    With women he gets incredibly clingy with the least bit of attention and if things go far enough and he starts liking the female, he gets obsessive and paranoid, jealous and squirrley.

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    crazy (070310)

    UFO in space, hurtling to earth, crashes and out exits the most beautiful, sweet, hot, smart, alluring, naked, killer humanoid-alien ever. She quickly assimilates without much detection, kills a guy but gets wounded, steals his car and clothes then heads for a big city.

    She stops at a hospital to clean up a wound and cozies up to the Doctor, a young, naive, fresh from med school boy. She makes a date, he accepts.

    She is stunning. He takes her to a Club after dinner. His new friends, the Doctors, greet him and his stunning date. These Doctors are slick and cunning; mysoginistic predators of the first degree.

    Our Doctor is in over his head with her and these new friends and is starting to lose favor. The lead Doctor guy plays inteference as one of the doctors starts dancing with her…young doctor is frustrated, argues…a small scene and young doctor grabs her. She pulls him aside and dumps him. He is crushed. She goes off with one of the doctors.

    Lead Doctor consoles young doctor, is trying to smoothe over but kid leaves.

    A week later, the kid comes back to his Doctor group to hang and finds that the guy that went with her is crazy jealous of her and acting sickly possessive. Kid realizes that our Alien girl is with ANOTHER member of the Doctor group. New doctor and jealous Doctor fight over her. Leader intervenes. Jealous Doctor falls apart.

    Jealous Doctor taken to loony bin. Kid tries to talk to woman..she refuses. He keeps pushing and she (alien hint) tells him to go away.

    He starts to investigate her (hospital records, databases, DL) finds zero and finds that she is posing as someone…

    Then it happens again…she moves to the next doctor…another fight ensues.

    And the Doctor in the looney bin goes full fledge nuts. The Kid is intrigued.

    What will he find, what does the alien want?

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    crazy (030307)

    (thriller-whodunnit, survival, revenge)

    Doctor, 35, proudly confirmed Bachelor, semi-mysoginistic, belongs to a group of young womanizing doctor friends.

    Group starts to unravel as a mysterious, sexually-charged, rich, classy Woman begins dating the members. She is hot. Openly sexual and insatiable…a horn dog not afraid of public dispalys. Whatsoever. She starts with a fringe member who she dumps for a closer to the center fof the group. The Fringe Doctor goes nut…literally.

    One by one they start to lose their minds; figuratively and literally – insane jealousy, posessiveness, paranoia, violence, anxiety attacks, hallucinations. They fight over her. Her overt sexuality tears the group apart as she casts aside one member for the next.

    (Inciting incident) Fringe member or inner memeber goes apeshit – violent scene – jealousy over the Woman.

    Act 1

    Our Lead Doctor begins investigating the fringe members (or inner) blow up and deterioration. He suspects the Woman; starts checking her out. It all point to her as the friends are ending up in padded rooms.…and that’s when it becomes his turn to meet her, and be drawn in.

    Who is this Woman? What is she doing to these men? Will it happen to him? Can he stop from slipping into madness?

    Act 2 is his entanglement with her and subsequent struggle to stop from meeting the same mental disturbance that the other doctors met. He meets it and loses. We go with him into CRAZY WORLD OF MIND – regression, trippy, cool (eternal sunshine stuff).

    He is mentally destroyed as a mysoginistic egocentric being and awakens shaken to the core and feeling violated but alive and clear minded.

    Act 3 is a twist, his awakening a surprise and his anger, his motivation is to stop this Woman…revenge. He goes after her!

    He finds her, and she’s doing the same thing in a group of Los Angeles Lawyers…one last confrontation, face to face…

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    A womanizing Doctor’s group of young womanizing doctor friends starts to unravel as a mysterious, sexually-charged Woman begins dating the members. One by one they start to lose their minds; literally – insane jealousy, posessiveness, paranoia, violence, anxiety attacks, hallucinations. They fight over her. Her overt sexuality tears the group apart as she casts aside one member for the next.

    Our Doctor begins investigating after the first one. He has no proof but he (using intuition for the first time in awhile) feels like she’s evil. So he investigates…and that’s when it becomes his turn to meet her, and be drawn in.

    Who is this Woman? What is she doing to these men? Will it happen to him? Can he stop from slipping into madness?

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